Saturday, November 5, 2011

George Orwell's Six Rules for Writing in Plain English, 1Q84, & The Elements of Style

I got my copy of Haruki Murakami's English translation of 1Q84 today. If you follow me on Twitter, you know that Amazon made me quite unhappy this morning given the condition of said book. I've already taken steps to get a replacement copy, but in the meantime I've decided I'm going to read as much as I can before the time limit to return it expires (30 days).

Inevitably thoughts turned to George Orwell.  1 Q (which is the way to pronounce the number nine in Japanese) 84 might seem the reason why, but it's actually moreso because E.B. White and William Strunk Jr. cite Orwell in The Elements of Style (II. Elementary Principles of Compostion #12 Use definite, specific, concrete language).

"To show what happens when strong writing is deprived of its vigor, George Orwell once took a passage from the Bible and drained it of its blood..."

Below is Orwell's translation followed by the verse from Ecclesiastes  (likely from the King James' version of the Bible).

Objective consideration of contemporary phenomena compels the conclusion that success or failure in competitve activities exhbits no tendency to be commensurate with innate capacity, but that a considerable element of the unpredictable must inevitably be taken into account.

I returned, and saw under the sun, that the race is not to the swift, nor the battle to the strong, neither yet bread to the wise, not yet riches to men of understanding, not yet favor to men of skill; but time and chance happenth to them all.

The citation is taken from Orwell's essay "Politics and the English Language" published in Horizon in April 1946 criticizing contemporary English.

In the essay Orwell advocates the use of Plain English and devised six rules to guide writers, that:

"...cuts out all stale or mixed images, all prefabricated phrases, needless repetitions, and humbug and vagueness generally. But one can often be in doubt about the effect of a word or a phrase, and one needs rules that one can rely on when instinct fails. I think the following rules will cover most cases"

The rules are:
  1. Never use a metaphor, simile, or other figure of speech which you are used to seeing in print.
  2. Never use a long word where a short one will do.
  3. If it is possible to cut a word out, always cut it out.
  4. Never use the passive where you can use the active.
  5. Never use a foreign phrase, a scientific word, or a jargon word if you can think of an everyday English equivalent.
  6. Break any of these rules sooner than say anything outright barbarous.
Now I don't want to stop talking about Orwell, at least not at the moment because let's face it my posts today have been not the most inspirational.

That being said, Monsieur Redacteur and I don't always see eye to eye on the writers we love. I don't like Hemingway much when it's all said and done. I think Joyce is boring. I brought "Ulysses" and "The Sun Also Rises" with me on vacation once and as boring as I found Las Vegas it was still more interesting to me than either of those books.

But we agree on Orwell. We've both read 1984 a couple dozen times. Once I was so inspired having re-read Animal Farm that I didn't realise all the writing I did was Animal Farm with vegetables.

Orwell's essay, "Why I Write" is one of themost inspiring things I've ever read on the reasons why "we" write. The first time I read it, I cried. Only one other piece of this personal nature written by a writer I greatly admire has ever had such an effect on me* heart, mind, body, and soul, but nothing moves me as much as these words Orwell wrote:

"...After the age of about thirty they almost abandon the sense of being individuals at all — and live chiefly for others, or are simply smothered under drudgery. But there is also the minority of gifted, willful people who are determined to live their own lives to the end, and writers belong in this class..."

I'm 30-cough-something and as the clock tick-tick-ticks away there is more external pressure being forced upon me to have as a Rastafarian I met the other day advised me,"four or five babies". I'm not a moron, I sense the changes in my body, but children are a lot of work, and I'd rather write books than have babies. (Insert birthing literature joke here.)

Sheer egoism. Desire to seem clever, to be talked about, to be remembered after death, to get your own back on the grown-ups who snubbed you in childhood, etc., etc. It is humbug to pretend this is not a motive, and a strong one. Writers share this characteristic with scientists, artists, politicians, lawyers, soldiers, successful businessmen — in short, with the whole top crust of humanity. The great mass of human beings are not acutely selfish. After the age of about thirty they almost abandon the sense of being individuals at all — and live chiefly for others, or are simply smothered under drudgery. But there is also the minority of gifted, willful people who are determined to live their own lives to the end, and writers belong in this class. Serious writers, I should say, are on the whole more vain and self-centered than journalists, though less interested in money.

I see what I want to see in Orwell's words above, but I'm also honest. That's why I made sure to cut and paste the bit in it's - uncensored for my own personal comfort zone - entirety. I won't go as far as to point a finger at my motives for wanting to be a writer, but I'll own up to my healthy vanity and my love of all things me, me, me.

I'll even go so far as to tell you a reason of my own.

When I was four I decided that words were the only way for me to make people understand that because I had a magical power to screw up my eyes and look at the world out of focus that I was in great danger. It was a great burden to possess such a frightening power in case I was kidnapped by street pirates (who had boats that looked like cars) who would force me to use my magical power for evil - that I should find a way to explain it to a few people I trusted (my grandparents) in case I ever went missing and as my sidekicks they'd have to understand how to help me turn off my power if such a thing ever happened.

Then one day there was a terrible storm and after the storm cleared and the sun came out there were all these poor earthworms dying in our garden. I tried to use my magical power to save them, but it was no use. All I could think to do was grab a metal bucket, fill it with drier dirt, and airlift the ones still alive and wriggling in the muddy puddles with my fingers. It grossed me out, but I worked as fast as I could. The sun's hot light shined down on a graveyard. I dumped my dirt bucket full of earthworms on a dry patch of grass under the roof of the house and cried my heart out over those I couldn't save.

I scratched into the damp earth squiggles. Lines that looked much like the almost fossilised earthworms themselves, but in my mind I was telling a legend of the great struggle against the sun that oppressed them and of a hero that was sent from the gods to carry them to safety. It was a legend that the earthworms would tell to their children and would never be forgotten.

I still remember this legend though I'm sure the earthworms have forgotten it. It would be another couple of years before I'd learn that earthworms have two hearts but no brains...

I write because deep down I believe it's my magical power (procrastination, television, movies, blogging, and nearly everything else being my Kryptonite).

And if you understand that it's not just my ego that makes me believe that, then maybe writing is your magical power too.







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Back to the Basics - Strunk & White's "The Elements of Style"

In September I posted about good reference books for writers. You'd think I would take my own advice, but after editing the first "section" of my manuscript it became obvious I hadn't. I wrote on the biggest Post-It on my person to jog my memory,


Re-read Strunk & White ASAP!

and so this morning as I organised my desk it stared up at me. I made some good coffee (Monsieur Redacteur being a practical man often just drinks instant in lieu of using the French press or cafetière, which takes more time to make) and Monsieur Redacteur fished out a copy of The Elements of Style.

I once had five copies of this book in various editions. I now only own three copies, each a different edition- though quite honestly I wish I hadn't spent so much time nitpicking on which edition was better than which - mostly because there were so many copies for sale on Amazon. For just about anyone the 1999 fourth edition is more than adequate.

That is, if you want to purchase it at all. There are those who think The Elements of Style isn't actually good advice at all. Here are extras on the subject that are worth a look: 50 Years of Stupid Grammar Advice and a forum where the book's merits or lack thereof are hotly debated on StackExchange.

I get the feeling Monsieur Redacteur isn't a fan of the book either because when I read this bit in The Elements of Style to him he said it was pretty much "useless" to me because I'm writing a "narrative".

II. Elementary Principles of Compostion

17. In summaries, keep to one tense.

In summarizing the action of a drama, the writer should use the present tense.  In summarizing a poem, story, or novel, he should use the present, though he may use the  past if it seems more natural to do so.  If the summary is in the present tense, antecedent action should be expressed by the perfect, if in the past, by the past perfect.

Now I didn't really understood what that meant mostly because the "perfect" doesn't exist in  French. 
I asked Monsieur Redacteur to explain it and he gave me the following chart at the back of some Engish grammar book he uses to teach.

Here are the important bits of the chart:

Present perfect (I have done)
Present perfect and past (I have done and I did)

There is no future tense in English (no conjugation of the verb).  You have to use I will or I'm going to.

Past continuous (I was going)
Past continuous (I was doing) and past simple (I did)
Past perfect (I had done)

Since I sort of understand it and sort of don't, I'll be attending Monsieur Redacteur's Sunday English class. The sole other student will be 9 years old. I'll update to let you know who gets it first. The 9 year old native French-Dutch speaker or me the 30-cough-something native Korean-French speaker.

My money's on the kid.

I just discovered this article on The New York Times website  when I was looking for a picture I remembered of E.B. White's typewriter with The Elements of style. It's definitely worth a read.


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Thursday, November 3, 2011

Andre Malraux - Statesman, Adventurer, & Author

A few years ago I met a man outside of a bookshop in Paris. His name was Olivier Todd. He wanted to sell some books out of his library. We spoke for about ten minutes and immediately I was fascinated by this impressive monsieur. He was a disciple of Jean-Paul Sartre for starters. He also wrote a few biographies I had long since known were important on Albert Camus and Andre Malraux. It was then because of his knowledge of Camus that I was always tempted to contact him again and ask him for a coffee, but quite honestly I felt my 'from the gut appreciation' of Camus (and my bare bones knowledge of Malraux) wasn't quite up to snuff.

Malraux has a reputation for being skimmed rather than read in France. I have read two of his works: La condition humaine (Man's Fate) and my personal favourite, Antimémoires (Anti-Memoirs).

It's a vastly important book. Malraux was a part of some major events during his lifetime: the Chinese Revolution, the Spanish Civil War, the French Resistance during WWII, and then as a minister in France for Charles de Gaulle. This book is the memoir of a man who was wounded and captured during WWII, only to escape to join the French underground movement to be captured and to escape again.

Or is it?

Malraux and his life have since been coined as "Malrucian legend". It was mostly invention. There was no relationship with Mao for example. They met, yes, but Andre made most of it up.

So here's some of the real skinny, courtesy of Monsieur Todd's biography:

He went to Cambodia and basically stole priceless works of art. When he was arrested the "Andres" came out in full force in support of Monsieur Malraux. Andre Maurois, Andre Gide, and even Andre Breton. He was then moved to Vietnam.

He met with Trotsky who claimed that Malraux "is incapable of moral independence; he was born biddable". Malraux abandoned Trotsky for the winning team. The problem is, given that de Gaulle was the last great president of France (in my opinion), it's hard to blame Malraux for hitching his wagon to de Gaulle's 5th Republic.

Considered by some as the French Hemingway, Malraux lived his life in search of fulfilling his love of myths. In La Voie Royale, Malraux wrote that "every adventurer is born a mythomaniac".

Malraux inscribed many of his letters with a cat - perhaps an indication of his many lives, but just before his death he scrawled the words, "it should have been otherwise".

In Antimémoires Malraux wrote something even more fitting that has always stayed with me: "La vérité d’un homme c’est d’abord ce qu’il cache." - The truth of a man is before that which he hides.

Perhaps that is what inspired Monsieur Todd to write his biography on Malraux, but I have always admired the man whether or not ''Ce n'était ni vrai ni faux, c'était vécu.'' - because regardless of whether or not the myth of Andre Malraux stands up to the truth because as he said in his Prix Goncourt winning book La condition humaine, "it was neither true or false, it was experienced".

And if you read Anti-memoirs, you'll see more clearly why I feel a certain love for Malraux. What he hid was a very sad life, but he certainly tried to make the best out of it. And sometimes he did.

Malraux putting together one of his "museums without walls", which is what he considered art books.







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Wednesday, November 2, 2011

This Month's Posts


Found this today on GadgetHovel and thought it was wildly appropriate as I'm dedicating all this month's posts to NaNoWriMo related stuff. I'm tripling the challenge of writing 50,000 words before November 31st with writing a daily blog, and Twitter'ing helpful tips to other "NaNoWriMos" across the globe in 140 characters or less.  You can follow me @LaFemmeFlaneuse on Twitter!

If you missed today's NaNoWriMo inspired post about Kurt Vonnegut's 8 Rules of Writing Fiction you can read it here.

Keep on writing NaNoWriMos!

I'm going to get back to it myself now.
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Writing Advice for Day 2 of NaNoWriMo from Kurt Vonnegut



Kurt Vonnegut's 8 Rules of Writing Fiction

1.Use the time of a total stranger in such a way that he or she will not feel the time was wasted.

2.Give the reader at least one character he or she can root for.

3.Every character should want something, even if it is only a glass of water.

4.Every sentence must do one of two things — reveal character or advance the action.

5.Start as close to the end as possible.

6.Be a sadist. Now matter how sweet and innocent your leading characters, make awful things happen to them — in order that the reader may see what they are made of.

7.Write to please just one person. If you open a window and make love to the world, so to speak, your story will get pneumonia.

8.Give your readers as much information as possible as soon as possible. To heck with suspense. Readers should have such complete understanding of what is going on, where and why, that they could finish the story themselves, should cockroaches eat the last few pages.

Bon courage NaNoWriMos and Happy Writing!
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Tuesday, November 1, 2011

Monday, October 31, 2011

Getting Ready for NaNoWriMo

November is National Novel Writing Month. Last year I had all these plans to participate, but of course life is what happens when you're making other plans, but this year my other plans were all about getting ready for NaNoWriMo.

Now technically speaking you're not supposed to start early, but planning and notes are allowed, so that's what I've been working on. All my notes, clippings, post-its, random napkin scribblings, and the like are now starting to amass. I keep anything I write on, so eventually I'll take all these "things" and use them. Or I won't and maybe I'll use them somewhere else another time.

Now 50,000 words isn't going to be the length of my novel. I have calculated my novel will be around 65 - 70,000 words. The 50,000 words are supposed to be a rough draft too. Since I've decided to rewrite the 130,000+ words I've already written, I'm basically starting a new novel.

Last week I worked on writing a synopsis. I called myself out by asking friends on Facebook if they would be willing to read my novel. A few of them said send it over. I wanted to send a synopsis first, so I had to write one. It's damn hard work mostly because you're not supposed to write a synopsis until you have a finished book. I wrote a synopsis and now I'm using it as an outline. My friends are impatient.

One month of writing not for quality, but for quantity. Catharsis. Respite from the pursuit. 50,000 words just for fun. A challenge. A deadine.

I can't wait.







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The Thoughts Occupying My Mind

Last night I posted the following to my Facebook page:


I have helped to write so many cover letters and online applications now for firms like UBS, GS, BarCap, MS, JP,etc. that I now feel like I could probably get a job as a quant myself. Except for the fact I'd pretty much like most of these places to burn to the ground.

And then I posted this amazing article from the New York Times/International Herald Tribune written by Thomas L. Friedman: http://mobile.nytimes.com/article?a=860524&single=1&f=28 . I encouraged my friends to read it because while I've been really quiet on the subject I am 100% in support of the Occupy Wall Street movement and the other "Occupy" movements happening around the world. Quite frankly, I think it's about damn time the people, the real people, the 99% of us who aren't billionaires or near billionaires, get pissed off.




I tend to not talk about politics on my blog. I worry that I am not well-informed enough and that I could possibly spread misinformation, but I wrote the following off the top of my head. It's my view on politics. It's what I would like to see happen. It's what pisses me off. It's what in my opinion has gone wrong and what needs to change.

It's why I'm 100% behind and in support of movements that could affect change.

I believe that:

Lobbying for any interest, think tank, or industry should be made completely illegal and the only way to insure that lobbying does not dictate government is to change the election process entirely.

If all campaigns were paid for by public funds and if each candidate were allotted the same amount of funds, not only would this insure that future politicians wouldn't already be "in debt" to contributors, but it also means that ANY person who met a list of criteria (in sync with the Constitution) could run for public office. This means that the real people with real issues and a real understanding of what concerns the people could actually make decisions for the people they represent - which is the very premise that the American republic (because it's not a democracy) was founded on.

The deregulation of the banking industry is a crime against the American people. Big banks need to be broken up not only to avert catastrophe in times of financial crisis, but because there is an obvious conflict of interest. The greatest con in American history  was getting the government and American taxpayers to bail the banks out when the failure of these institutions was due to greed, negligence, and a complete disregard for what little regulation remained.

Why people are angry now is not only because they have less money, less jobs, and less opportunities to accumulate their own wealth - but they also need to be angry about the fact that the same lobbyists pushing for further deregulation screaming "big government is communism" is the same fucking industry that accepted a bail out and didn't admit that by doing so they were actually accepting a level of government help that is more akin to socialism. Terms like "government interference" are thrown around loosely to confuse those Americans who see the involvement of the government as a bad thing and rightfully so in many cases. With the propaganda used against the American people, it is no wonder that many Americans don't understand the inherent differences between a communist government and a socialist one. Why should they? Reagan pretty much made it his sole purpose during his presidency to make Americans fear communism and socialism as "evil" without bothering to explain they are not the same systems even by the simplest of definitions.

In France the govenrment has a history of bailing out big French companies such as TGV/Alstrom and Air France because letting them fail was worse for the greater good. It meant that tens of thousands of people would lose their jobs and the impact to the French economy and the reputation of French industry was too high a price for the French people to pay in the long run. However regulations were tightened further as a preventive measure and to give people more faith in the government's abilities.

Let's be clear: bailing out the banks was better for the banks. The American people were given no choice but to pay for the mistakes made without their knowledge. Instead of the brunt of the impact being absorbed by the government, the impact was felt in every wallet of every American who doesn't sleep on a mattress stuffed with bills in a massive McMansion that also contains a "Scrooge McDuck" room where they could (if physics didn't mean you would die instantly upon impact) dive into massive piles of gold.

I am sick of seeing the wealth that is built upon the backs of the people. I am sick of seeing people profit from the human need to simply be physically healthy in order to live free of disease and pain.

I am tired of the consumerism and the resulting problem of what happens when you can't actually keep up with the Jones' - and all in a country where a vast majority of the population adheres to a religious principle of "do not covet thy neighbour's goods". Thankfully in America (and other countries thanks to America's biggest export: capitalism) if you can't keep up with the Jones' you can always get a high interest credit card with the actual terms in extremely fine print.

Nevermind that the company might a) be owned by a bank or b) that the cardholder can pay up to $0.40 on the dollar for the priviledge of owing these credit companies money, without accounting for other fees and costs they don't understand but will eventually be held accountable to pay or c) that banks make a tremendous profit from selling these debts on the market.

I am further disgusted by the religious right that won't support universal health care; that judges when they should not lest they be judged; and have essentially turned religion into a for-profit industry while maintaining 501(c)(3) tax exempt charity status that allows groups like the Mormons to throw $40 million at halting gay marriage because it conflicts with their belief system or the billions of dollars spent by the Catholic Church to overturn Roe vs. Wade.

As long as government officials can be bought and paid for by those who have no interest in helping the American people in any way except to continue to profit off of their hard work, pain, and suffering there will be no real change for America.

The rich 2%  will weather this crisis as the rich weathered 1929 and other economic recessions. As the gap widens more and more people will fall into it or, as the bail outs proved, be thrown into it.

Combine economic depression with lobbyists fighting against the people on every possible level from religion to destroying the environment to insuring that health care will be more and more unaffordable for the middle  and lower classes - and the only thing that can and must happen is that every individual who sees the real problems must then communicate their knowledge to another individual until there are enough people to stand up and say NO, WE AREN'T GOING TO TAKE THIS ANYMORE.

I broke my rule about writing openly about politics because I can't be in New York right now standing alongside the protestors in Liberty Park. I want to be. I want to be there because I represent a contingent that the media says isn't present in Liberty Park, but I can assure you is.

My friends aren't hippies. My friends are highly educated with degrees from Wharton, Harvard, Yale, Stanford, Columbia, and my alma mater, M.I.T. We represent a generation that was told that by accumulating these degrees we were insuring our future success. Some of our parents took out mortages to pay for our expensive educations. Some of us have hundred of thousands of dollars worth of debt from getting these degrees.

The media wants to pant the protestors with the same brush, but the real beauty of what is happening in Liberty Park is that the real America is there. There are people from each and every walk of life - bankers who quit their jobs to be there because even they can  no longer ignore the obvious stink wafting around their offices; teachers who are fed up with cuts to the education budget who see the disadvantage these cuts inflict upon the young; the people who without them there would be no infrastructure, no order, no basic services.

Regardless of where you come from or what you "have", the same government makes decisions that effect everyone except the 2% who use their wealth to purchase a "have it your way" government that only benefits their profit margins that didn't even translate to profit for Burger King when it was their company jingle because it is not profitable to let people have exactly what they want whether its burgers or banking.

The people need to make those in government accountable to the people again and for the first time in a really long time, I feel like real change is going to happen.

If you are one of the people standing up for the rest of us, I just want to say thank you. While I cannot be in the US right now, I am doing what I can and that means speaking up, staying informed, and offering my support albeit from afar.

The tenacity, resolve, and solidarity that the Occupy movement has displayed across the world has made me want to give more to the world I live in and to stand up for what I believe.

The OWS retweeted a quote I posted the other night: "If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything".

Monsieur Redacteur would like to add, "You don't have to know what you're fighting for, when it's clear what you're fighting against", said by George Orwell.

So let's stand up and fight!

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